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this
        box



is


                        empty now


the
          cell
       phone



                          battery

     arrived



a




day





                      later



         than



                        expected


    but


        all is


   well

                    now


the


bill


is


in


my


mother's


name

---

there is more paper here than clothing
my iron is broken
the water leaks onto pages
staining pages

with their own ink


it boils when it spills


my shirts are ironed dry
pressed
so dry

they and I
crave the water
once more

once more

the paper is indifferent
it is the water
the water water ubiquitous
and unquiet.

---

swept clean
the hardwood floor

the floor and nothing more

---

"the books will have to go,"
      the closet and the mirror tell me.

"No. No." They have no ears to hear me,
but they know. They know.

---

i sleep sideways
nowadays

on the bed
my head in a corner
the building

my halo

there is more sheet for me

there is comfort

the building
the brick outside
the windows
the pictures
the paintings
the books
and nails
and walls
walls
walls
meeting together
at a common understanding

all limbs of a lover
draped around me

the walls
keep the demons all away

and i'm never lonely
in the night

nowadays
sideways
8/1/13 GH.
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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-08-26
Nowadays. Side Ways. by ~FritoB is full of allusions and allotted points. Can you connect the dots and catch the references? ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
:iconapparate:
apparate Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really liked this. Thank you for sharing and congratulations on the DD.
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:iconthegeekofwar:
thegeekofwar Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013
nice job!
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:iconchipchinka:
Chipchinka Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013   Writer
Pretty intense!  I love the way this flows and the way an occasional chuckle escapes between moments of sheer awe.  This is brilliant!  
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:iconsteiin:
Steiin Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013
Beautiful Couldn't Resist Reading a Wonderful Piece Like This.
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Good job
Very interesting piece :)
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beeZah Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful!

My favorite quote is,
"Walls
meeting together
at a common understanding."

Made me smile. :)
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MermaidInDisguise Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so out of my league, and I think it's out of a lot of people's leagues, so perhaps that's why you haven't gotten more recognition for this piece. But I think this is brilliant and truly inspiring, and you deserve so much more feedback than what you've been given. 
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snowywolf13 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This is beautiful.
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:iconshakes8:
shakes8 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Student General Artist
That is fantastic. absolutely beautiful.
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:iconlaurotica:
laurotica Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013   Writer
With an intro like that, with those words and that formatting, you couldn't not reel me in.  Lovely work, and congrats on the DD :aww:
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:icondastardlyninjas:
Dastardlyninjas Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful. 
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:iconrhynwilliams:
RhynWilliams Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013   Traditional Artist
worded so well, well done getting the dd!
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:iconhippiehebe:
HippieHebe Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats on the DD!
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:iconnawkaman:
nawkaman Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013
very interesting formatting.  I enjoyed this very much!
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:iconshadowedacolyte:
ShadowedAcolyte Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013
Congrats! I really liked the shift from the one-word-per-line slow intro to a more typical poetic structure, sort of like the point in a song where the lyrics start after the instrumental intro.
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AgonizingSwordfish Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Congratulations on the Daily Deviation :huggle:
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:iconbeeinthebottle:
beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013   Writer
I find myself wanting the first part to be concrete poetry and shaped like an empty box. That being said -- I like the writing here a lot. Congrats on the DD!
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:iconlaurasnake:
laurasnake Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Woah, amazing piece! :la:
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:iconschneefuechsin:
Schneefuechsin Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconcongratsddplz:
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:icontinaaw:
tinaaw Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely
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:iconphovos-the-raptor:
Phovos-the-Raptor Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013
It's an interesting read, slightly spoiled by the fact that you've missed capital letters out left, right and center.
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:iconnichrysalis:
Nichrysalis Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Many writers do this, especially when it comes to poetry. May I ask what words you envisioned would be capitalized (there's variations of doing it).
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Phovos-the-Raptor Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013
Well, mostly, the first letter at the start of a sentence and all cases of I. Even if the first letter of a sentence isn't capitalized, I always should be. It just... feels like text talk and ruins the feelings if you don't capitalize those I's.
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013
Just curious, have you ever read any E.E. Cummings?

I grant you, too many people leave out capitalization or punctuation without a purpose or without it aiding a piece or style, but rules like these should never be treated as hard or fast when it comes to poetry.  IMO, of course.
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dagoth-jeff Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, it's pretty common. Somehow it's okay, I have no idea how or why.
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goats Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013
this is really great, congrats!
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:iconris03:
Ris03 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Student Digital Artist
:iconcongratsddplz:
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD, it's a very interesting piece! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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